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24 November 2008 @ 10:50 pm
nov 24: TWFanFic: In Shadows of Resentment [Torchwood Characters]  

In Shadows of Resentment;
Unspecified Characters; PG-13; 200words;
I know who I see when I read this, what I want to know is
which characters you- dear reader- see when you read it?

It's all barely disguised looks of longing; lingering fingers over coffee mugs and casual brushes against smiling lips. No ones looking, he whispers into the shadows and hesitation is all but gone as hands take hold of hands so gently, cradling them close as soft-warm lips caress a soft-warm mouth and they share a secret smile, tasting the lust and love that grows between them.


He tastes it too, tastes it like bitter ashes in his mouth; coating teeth and tongue and choking at the back of his throat as he swallows resentment and bile and watches from the shadows to their shadows as they cosy up for stolen kisses in stolen moments and it burns him to see this, to know this and he hates this, wants it for himself with a passion that scares him, vehemence clawing its way to resentful hatred in his eyes as he watches, always watching from the shadows of the hub as they steal themselves away to disused corners of half-forgotten rooms, but always he is there.


Always he is there to watch and hate and want what is not his to have but he wants it. And oh, he shall have it.

[ end. ]
[ written as part of Caspe-Wri-Mo ] 

mood: crappycrappy
music: mojo!radio
ditchwaterrosie: breathditchwaterrosie on November 24th, 2008 11:33 pm (UTC)
*thinks a bit more*

...This is difficult. I can see Jack being the resenty one...and Ianto...possibly Gwen as much as it pains me to say.


But then again, it could be more canon and instead of Ianto, it's Owen.


I like the ambiguity of this. I am now going to sit and ponder this for many hours... :D
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ Jack; oh fuckcs_whitewolf on December 1st, 2008 04:00 pm (UTC)
::grins:: thank you! I'm rather fond of this piece for the sheer fact that whomever I saw when writing it isn't necissarily who everyone else reading will see. And thus far, no one has seen who I did. It's awesome really.

I like that you saw Jack watching Ianto and Gwen. I can see that too. Especially since Jack does seem to want both of them and neither of them seem like they want to share Jack. ...Or then again, as you say, it could be Owen ;) hehe.

Thanks for reading, hun!
Michellehalftime1030 on November 25th, 2008 12:54 am (UTC)
Oohh... I read it as Owen commenting on Jack & Ianto.
It's quite brilliant ;-)
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ 2.05 \\ Geeky Owencs_whitewolf on December 1st, 2008 04:01 pm (UTC)
Ooo, nice guess ;) pretty close to who I was imagining too, though you'd have to swap Owen as the watcher! hehe.

Thank you for reading!
CS WhiteWolf
daylyn: writing solitare_ayrdaomeidaylyn on November 25th, 2008 06:14 am (UTC)
Ouch. Painful and scary and utterly perfect.

Hmm... maybe it's the weevil. ;-)
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ 2.06 \\ Ianto & Weevilcs_whitewolf on December 1st, 2008 04:02 pm (UTC)

omg! the weevil!? Now why hadn't I thought of that? lmao. I love your mind sometimes, haha. Though, is it the weevil watching? Or someone watching the Weevil/Someone? XD

Thank you, hun!
mrs_cj_harknessmrs_cj_harkness on November 25th, 2008 07:50 am (UTC)
Oh that is so good, but now I have to think :P
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ Ianto; red tie cheeky grics_whitewolf on December 1st, 2008 04:03 pm (UTC)
heh, thank you! And there is no right or wrong answer. It really can be whoever you want it to be ;)

absinthefairy88: cute!iantoabsinthefairy88 on November 25th, 2008 03:10 pm (UTC)
For me it's one of two.

Either Owen looking at Jack/Ianto post Out of Time

Or it's Ianto looking at Owen/Gwen sometime round about Cyberwoman - Countrycide

That's what I get anyway when I read this. Knowing me I'm totally wrong lol
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ 2.05 \\ Head&Hand Jobcs_whitewolf on December 1st, 2008 04:04 pm (UTC)
I like your guesses! And honestly, there isn't a right or wrong answer, so whoever you want it to be- it is! When I wrote it, the three characters in my mind were those from your first guess, but I'm seeing so many other possibilities now after reading everyone elses comments! heh.

Thank you for reading!
Electro Club: lucy_locket  Ianto da cintura pra cimaelectro_club on November 29th, 2008 04:35 am (UTC)
Jack about Owen/Gwen.
I know Jack probably wouldn't be this resentful, but... First thing that came to my mind.

And me likes it very much.
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ Jack; all work no playcs_whitewolf on December 1st, 2008 04:07 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much for reading! And I could see your thinking for Jack watching Owen/Gwen. Especially if it were set at some point in S2. XD

CS WhiteWolf
missthingsplacemissthingsplace on November 30th, 2008 06:43 pm (UTC)
Owen watching Jack and Ianto me thinks ...
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ Ianto; WTF!?cs_whitewolf on December 1st, 2008 04:07 pm (UTC)
Pretty close to my thinking, only Owen wasn't doing the watching ;) hehe.

Thanks for reading!
CS WhiteWolf
like Lazarus, hungry for this.theohsocurlyone on November 30th, 2008 07:31 pm (UTC)
Ooo, I love this! I love the imagery; it's incredibly vivid and and harsh to read.

(And for the record, it's Adam in my mind...)
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ 2.01 \\ Ianto fucking Jonescs_whitewolf on December 1st, 2008 04:09 pm (UTC)
Ooo! Now here's someone thinking outside the norm- I do approve! I hadn't thought of him whilst writing him, but I'm liking it alot XD

Thanks very much! I'm glad you approve, I like experimenting with my style ever so often, and am overjoyed this piece has come across as I intended it too.

CS WhiteWolf
Rhi: don't shootvipersweb on November 30th, 2008 07:47 pm (UTC)
oh interesting. I like the ambiguity of this. so many different people this could be.
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ 2.05 \\ Killer Iantocs_whitewolf on December 1st, 2008 04:10 pm (UTC)
X) thank you for reading! And yes, I really wanted people to be able to read this and see absolutely anyone in place of the unmentioned characters, anyone they wanted to see. I'm glad that works :)

CS WhiteWolf
hab318princess: Janto kisshab318princess on November 30th, 2008 07:52 pm (UTC)
I know it can't be him (I think) but I felt it could be Captain John being jealous of Jack/Ianto.

(see, that's what you get from ambiguity, silly ideas!)
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ Earpiececs_whitewolf on December 1st, 2008 04:12 pm (UTC)
It can be anyone you want it to be ;) the sky is your limit really ;)

I hand't thought of Captain John myself, but as with the comment above mentioning "Adam" as one of the characters, the more I think about it the more I can see it!

Ambiguity ftw! Yes? hehe.

Thank you!
rabecka: JackRetconrabecka on November 30th, 2008 09:28 pm (UTC)
I sort of saw Owen watching Jack/Ianto, but for me, it would have been a very OOC Owen. I love ohsocurlyone's suggestion of Adam. That fits so beautifully that I really hope she's right.
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ Lost Souls \\ Bellcs_whitewolf on December 1st, 2008 04:14 pm (UTC)
I saw the three characters you first mentioned, only for me Owen wasn't watching ;) heh. And yeah, I like the thought of Adam too! He hadn't crossed my mind at all but the more I think on it, the more I like it!

There isn't a right or wrong answer though :) and I'm so glad everyone is seeing different characters and not just the ones I myself saw.

Thank you for reading!
CS WhiteWolf
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crabby_lionesscrabby_lioness on November 30th, 2008 09:43 pm (UTC)
Very good.
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ 2.10 \\ Ianto's unimpressedcs_whitewolf on December 1st, 2008 04:14 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

CS WhiteWolf
(Anonymous) on November 30th, 2008 10:08 pm (UTC)
It seemed like Adam to me
that could be why he has the relationship with Tosh, cause hes jealous that hes never had the kind of love jack/ianto do
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ 2.07 \\ Ianto/Rissen Mittencs_whitewolf on December 1st, 2008 04:15 pm (UTC)
Another vote for Adam, eh? I like it! He's not who I saw, but he definitely fits- I can certainly see him being that resenting over something/someone he doesn't have.

Thanks for reading!
CS WhiteWolf
thrace_adams: Jack/Ianto Christmasthrace_adams on December 1st, 2008 06:29 am (UTC)
It's totally Owen watching Jack/Ianto for me - because Owen just seems like the type to get that angry and that vehement.
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ 2.03 \\ Janto kisscs_whitewolf on December 1st, 2008 04:16 pm (UTC)

Yeah, he is a bit moody like that, isn't he? haha. It's pretty close to who I was thinking, only Owen wasn't doing the watching ;)

Thank you!
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The Patron Saint of Switchblade Fights: Yunascissorknot on December 1st, 2008 08:09 am (UTC)
Wow that was really well written. You conveyed a whole lot of emotion with very little words.

When I read it it came off as Owen watching my guess would be Jack and Ianto since I do not see anyone else making out in the Hub. He seemed bitter after Diane left. So in my head it would make sense if he was the one getting so upset over some PDA.
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ 2.01 \\ gun to the headcs_whitewolf on December 1st, 2008 04:19 pm (UTC)
Quite a few people are seeing Owen watching Jack/Ianto. And I totally get how that fits- he can be the type to get really quite moody and bitter over something he doesn't have but wants. Most especially if it were after Diane left him. Poor boy!

Thank you for reading!
CS WhiteWolf