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17 December 2007 @ 12:23 am
TWFanFic: What Happens Tomorrow [Jack Harkness/Ianto Jones]  
I'm torn between relief and excitement- the writerinadrawerresults have just been posted and I (thank ye lords!) have made it through to the next round! XD I'm feeling relief because for one terrifying moment, when I realised the results were up, I honestly expected to see my draw grayed out. And excitement because it wasn't and I'm through! Yeah!!

My entry this week was: What Happens Tomorrow [Jack/Ianto | PG/13 | Possible Spoilers for "Out of Time"] 

I asked the mod for any feedback- positive or negative on my entry and she told me I'd recieved the following:
"Score: +1
A really believable moment between Jack and Ianto, and an almost necessary one following Out of Time. Subtle yet poignant.
"

So, predictably I'm rather smiley at the moment. I'm posting my entry up here also, to find out what my dear flist thinks of the fic, so please do let me know your opinions- good and bad!

Title: What Happens Tomorrow
Rating(s): PG-Rated
Pairing(s): Jack/Ianto
Warning(s): Possible spoilers for ‘Out of Time’.
Lyric: You've got to believe
it'll be alright again / We've got to believe
it'll be alright in the end.

- - -

This is the last place I expected to find you.” Jack said, his words whisper soft as he stepped out onto the rooftop of the Millennium Centre. Ianto stood at the near edge of the building with his hands shoved deep into his pockets and his shoulders hunched. He inclined his head in acknowledgement of Jack’s words but said nothing and Jack was left with the impression that Ianto had been waiting for him to turn up- sooner or later.

The Captain smiled; his lips curving upwards with the gesture that did not quite reach his eyes as he stepped closer, his footsteps an echo across the panelled wood of the rooftop. He stopped beside Ianto, his body turned towards the other man as he regarded him intently. Ianto shifted after a long moment of scrutiny, shooting Jack a dark look as he was forced to further respond to the Captain’s presence.

 
“Sir?” Ianto enquired, his tone a polite contrast to the fire burning in his eyes.
 
“What are you doing up here, Ianto?” Jack asked.
 
“Trying not to be too predictable, sir.” Ianto answered waspishly.
 
“Predictability was never your problem,” Jack replied wryly.
 
“No,” he agreed, raising a hand to his face and pressing long fingers into the softness of his eyelids- the gesture done as if in some misguided attempt to push back the images and memories that plagued him so often of late. “It never was.”
 
“Ianto?” Jack reached out, placing a strong hand upon the other man’s shoulder. Ianto tensed beneath his hold but Jack did not let go.
 
“I- look, I’m sorry.” Ianto breathed, dropping his hand from his face. He stared unseeingly out over the brightly lit Bay; Christmas lights sparkling almost classily against the black backdrop of the night sky.
 
“There’s nothing to apologise for.” Jack squeezed at his shoulder.
 
“I don’t like fighting with you,” Ianto continued as if unhearing and Jack gave a hum of agreement. “But sometimes… god, Jack, sometimes it just gets so hard to breathe and I can’t- don’t hold back. Not with you. And after what happened with John I just- ”
 
He trailed off, turning to look at Jack who smiled at him sadly. They’d only hours ago laid John Ellis to rest in the Morgue and though Jack had stashed his coat and Ianto’s car, showered and plastered his patented grin upon his face- somehow Ianto- tight-lipped and sullen- had known that the elder man wasn’t the only who’d tried (both failing and succeeding) to kill himself this evening.
 
“It’ll get easier,” Jack promised, without apology, “we’ll get easier,” Ianto shook his head. “It will,” he urged, “We’ve just got to learn how to… how to breathe again, Ianto; how to breathe and love and let someone else in.”
 
The laugh he received to that was anything but mirthful and Jack urged Ianto to turn, reaching out to nudge the Welshman’s face upwards and holding him in place.
 
“You’ve got to believe it’ll be alright again.” Jack moved closer, his brow furrowed as he stared deeply into Ianto’s eyes. “I’m sorry.”
 
Though Ianto shook his head he was already reaching up, grabbing Jack’s hands in his own and holding them tight. He pressed a long kiss to the knuckles of Jack’s right hand, feeling the Captain’s fingers tighten around his own.
 
We’ve got to believe it’ll be alright in the end.” Ianto whispered, glancing upwards. Jack swallowed heavily, and nodded.
 
“Yes.” He agreed, freeing his hands and drawing Ianto into his arms.

- - -

End.

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Also, for those of you who voted, check out the Open Post, where you can let other entrants know what you thought of their submissions!

 
 
mood: cheerfulcheerful
 
 
 
Ambra: Lost/FotC; Jearsctheinvisible17 on December 17th, 2007 01:06 am (UTC)
Yay, you made it!! \o/ Knew you would. :)

And fic? *sniffs* This was great, very great! (So great that I'm crying. Hormones?) And I agree with the feedback - a very believable moment between them. They have such problems, don't they?

Thank you! :D
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ Red Tie Cheeky Grincs_whitewolf on December 17th, 2007 01:24 am (UTC)
::smishes:: Thanks, babes! Though crying!? Woah, I don't even know how to handle that! X) ...is it bad to be chuffed? ::hugs some more::

I'm so pleased you liked it and found it realistic, I guess that was my main concern over it!
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In hell, I'll be there-a-burning.....dr_is_in on December 17th, 2007 01:11 am (UTC)
Told you that you would make it through! I forwarded you the "feedback" I got......the concern I had about how I used the lyrics was a legit concern.
Campaspe: Mood \\ Hyde Grincs_whitewolf on December 17th, 2007 01:22 am (UTC)
As I said in my email reply: I thought your fic worked just fine with the way you incorperated the lyrics! And with everyone weaving their's into their fics, I'd have thought you'd get points for keeping it as a song. Go figure! Either way, you made me angst over Owen (which as you know is a great acomplishment!) and you're through to round three! So we can only strive to be better next time :)
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daylyndaylyn on December 17th, 2007 01:34 am (UTC)
Awwww... that's sweet and sad and just wonderful. Yes, I can see many difficulties between them -- and a lot of pain. But still... there's hope too. Just lovely.
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ Ianto/Jack Morguecs_whitewolf on December 17th, 2007 01:55 am (UTC)
Thank you, darling! I don't feel this is my best work for these boys, but it makes a nice moment between them at least- so glad you liked it :)

::smish::
OneSarcasticChicksarcasticchick on December 17th, 2007 02:52 am (UTC)
woot! congrats on advancing!

and nice, lovely piece. a perfect moment dovetailed into the epi. that epi so needed something to wrap it up between the two...at least i thought it did *g* and you did a beautiful job taking ianto out of his 'normal' environment and slapping him into jack's, addressing 'life' and what it means to both to live.

cause really, it shouldn't just be jack (and horatio cain - csi: miami) looking all sexy (or obscene in horatio's case) on top of those rooftops. ;)
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ Ianto/Jack Morguecs_whitewolf on December 17th, 2007 11:37 pm (UTC)
Thank you! :) and cheers for reading, darling! I felt that having Ianto on the rooftop helped give him a bit of standing with Jack, the invasion almost of Jack's 'place' allowing Ianto to address the concern and hurt he feels over the situation with some level of authority. ...well, that was the intention anyway!

And you're right, Ianto should have some sexy time ontop of tall buildings ;)

((Horatio's not obscene looking!! ...is he!?))
Trust me, I know what you're doingseize on December 17th, 2007 03:15 am (UTC)
is good.
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ Blond Iantocs_whitewolf on December 17th, 2007 11:37 pm (UTC)
Thanking you!
onehundredmoonsonehundredmoons on December 17th, 2007 04:54 am (UTC)
Of all the lovely things in this little fic, the dialogue really stands out as being true to character. Very nice!
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ Nobody's Bitchcs_whitewolf on December 17th, 2007 11:39 pm (UTC)
Thank you very much! When I started writing this, it was the dialogue that came first before even the reason for their rooftop moment :) I'm glad you found it believable!

Peace,
CS WhiteWolf
jenn: doctor who - jackso_severus on December 17th, 2007 04:59 am (UTC)
yay congrats!
I was waiting for when you posted yours because I have 0 time to read anything but aww yours always have so much emotion
Campaspe: Doctor Who \\ 8th Doctorcs_whitewolf on December 17th, 2007 11:40 pm (UTC)
<33 aww thank you, hun! Am very happy to not have disappointed :)
Rubydreamerrubydreamer on December 17th, 2007 05:37 am (UTC)
Very sad, but beautiful
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ Close to youcs_whitewolf on December 17th, 2007 11:40 pm (UTC)
Thank you for reading! :)
Georgie: Torchwood - Jack/Ianto (space between)indiefairy on December 17th, 2007 09:25 am (UTC)
Aww that was brilliant hun. Very believable and aww ::huggles Jack and Ianto::

Congratulations on getting through to the next round XD ::smishes::
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ J/J A Kisscs_whitewolf on December 17th, 2007 11:42 pm (UTC)
::return smish::

I swear, for a challenge community, this writerinadrawer thing sure knows how to get you riled up! XD

Am glad you liked :) I honestly worried that everyone would hate it!

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Casey: torchwood (general)casey_bee on December 17th, 2007 12:52 pm (UTC)
*sniffle* I love your fics Caspe, that was just beautiful. <3
Campaspe: Torchwood \\ Red Tie Cheeky Grincs_whitewolf on December 17th, 2007 11:43 pm (UTC)
X) thank you, my lovie!

I'm soso pleased you liked it :)

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